Pseudo-mangapage

Sharp lineart , very pleasant!

Alas my lack of English vocabulary and time will make it short.

I found damageable that the coloring is did in reversal : for exemple the armor of the daughter is darker than her skin herself.
The lineart of the facial features and her character is not what's coming out the most
you art could be improved , and don't get me wrong , your characters are nice and your picture overall is great too! It just that I point out what seems to me something that could be great to point out <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=" (Smile)"/>

You characters desgn are greats : originality (earings scars, )facial expression!

the idea of cutting into panels got me in the action!
Plus, I like backstories! And this seems promising! ( and dropping bits of information like you did is perfect! <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=" (Smile)"/> )

I gave 2.5 for originality because I need to see more before!
Impact 5 because it got me into your story and your job is done for me here
Vision, 5 because it's seems promising!
Tecnique 3 , nothing that breaks wall, but still great! I sense potential in your picture , I just point out for the coloring espacially you are just working with dark-to-grey.. shades and your colors using should be the point you should get your attention on. This should really -(just think about it and find your way <img src="e.deviantart.net/emoticons/s/s…" width="15" height="15" alt="" data-embed-type="emoticon" data-embed-id="391" title=" (Smile)"/> - make a major step in improving your picture!

Hope I was fair ! My best regards , Siolan. ~